Im working on some stories in witch I need honest feedback, opinions and i need to know what would you change.

If you see something wrong on any of my stories pls tell me... 

what I'm working on are:

Deadly sweet: an psychopath known as Romeo is obsess with finding " The One" and He would do anything the find her and killing anyone who is not her and the search of a Detective named Roman Green who's new in case that many officers have said that just a bogeyman because the evidence have been missing for year.   

 The Mimic virus: This virus makes anyone who's infected into flesh eating sickos that will mimic any action their pray does. Giving our surviver's a hard time.

Super Normal: is about the struggle of our protagonist ( Matthew Walker ) in the adventure of fitting in Paxson a place full of... special people and the battle between good and bad.

The forbidden kingdom: is about a Treasure Hunter named Jack who's looking for a special item named "La llave del cielo" the key to heaven which it's suppose to be an city made of gold where the god lived but his not the only one looking for it..
 
( My friend Flamingkey is doing a story that about jake jack's brother and his search for a blade made by gods is't pretty good)

if you think is interesting tell me... ill be realizing Chapter 1 of each story soon.