@IATensuraFC
So how are you doing?
Bored, plus school is giving out tons of work, and even during free time, I just prefer to do other stuff, like games or watch new anime. Maybe when things quiet down and I have nothing to do, I will start writing again
School Started Man….
hello author, how is your day going??
i hope its going well.
so...... here is the thing. I also want to try writing of my own. i have been reading stories and novels for a little while now, and to be honest i was really really bored today. so I thought "What the hell" Let's try writing a story.
but you see is one teeny tiny issue a name for my character. and when i reached that part my mind went full blank i had no idea what to call my character.
so I thought why not ask the person whose story I read the most recently?
and i would hate to call him y/n, its sounds to boring.
so I have a request, tell me a name. like honestly any name you think would suit a mystery store owner. I am open to any and all name suggestions you can give me it doesn't have to be a grand name.
thx for the suggestion man, I think I will go with Zad.
I already uploaded the first chapter. It's called Bartering with Stories: A Multiversal Tale. I read a similar story a while back(like 6 months back, I can't even remember the name anymore), and I wanted to try something like that, where I can have my character interact with many others while still like avoiding not knowing how actually to make them meet each other.
I am thinking like, I introduce a character then after like 3 chapters I bring the character back and show how that changed that character and their world.
I am thinking I do like 1 or 2 good characters then like perhaps show a character who falls towards "evil" and is not able to change for the better. you know to show how power can change some for the good and some for the bad.
Could you tell me what you think of the first chapter?
:P I wrote the first chapter but now I am not sure like what character to bring for the next chapter. If you have any ideas do let me know.
@Rayanghost is the setting fantasy, or real world? If it’s either of it, then what culture is behind that setting, Asian, European or American? If it’s Asian themed fantasy/real world than I would say Gesuto this name is basically an opposite of the word ‘owner’ in Japanese. If it’s European or Western influence than… Zad (Middle Name of your choice) Kiel or just Zad Kiel. Well that’s the best name that I could think of right upon my head :P. Man I am looking forward to your book!
sup author, Wattpad won't let me reply to your comment so here I am.
my main complaints are:-
( the complaints mainly come from the story moving way too fast in like power progression and having no character development(like I think even you can agree that if someone lives for a long time his mentality will change,))
1. Overpowered Character Right Off the Bat: One of the main issues I noticed is that Feldway becomes overwhelmingly powerful almost immediately. While wanting to showcase his strength is understandable, it can undermine the story's tension and development. Characters that start of way too powerful often leave little room for growth or meaningful challenges. It might be more engaging to gradually build up Feldway's abilities, allowing readers to see his progression and struggle. This not only makes for a more compelling narrative but also keeps the stakes high and the readers invested.
2. Respect for the Original Character: Another concern is how Feldway's character is portrayed in relation to his original depiction. In the canon material, Feldway has a distinct personality, set of motivations, and way of interacting with the world. Your version of Feldway seems to deviate significantly from these established traits, which can be jarring for fans of the original series. It's important to maintain a balance between adding your unique twist to the character and staying true to their core attributes. Respecting the character's original nature will help maintain the integrity of your fanfic and resonate more with readers who love the source material.
FUCK the 2000 word limit now I have to divide my review.
btw remember to have a clear idea of what you actually what from your story and WHERE you plan to take it.
like if you write and upload chapter 5 for example you should already have a clear idea of where you want to take the story in the next 2-3 chapters.
basically have a idea for the future already ready.
also try to look at the story from the perspective of the reader.
As authors, we often get deeply immersed in our narratives, characters, and plot twists. This immersion is part of the creative process, allowing us to explore intricate details and build rich worlds. However, periodically stepping back to view your story through the eyes of a reader can offer valuable insights and benefits:
Clarity and Coherence: Readers don’t have access to your internal thought process. Viewing your work from their perspective helps ensure that your plot points are clear and coherent. What makes perfect sense to you might be confusing to someone encountering your story for the first time.
Pacing and Engagement: Experiencing your story as a reader can help you gauge the pacing. Are there parts that drag or seem rushed? Readers' engagement is crucial, and understanding their experience can help you maintain a balanced and captivating narrative flow.
Character Development: Readers form attachments to characters based on their actions, dialogue, and growth throughout the story. Seeing your characters through their eyes can highlight areas where character development might need more depth or consistency.
@Rayanghost Thank you so much bro! This helps a lot!! Currently I am rewriting the Primordial chapter (Yeah I skipped a lot of chapter between the 3rd and this but I just had great idea so I am rewriting it), and it would help if you could check out my new rewritten third chapter of the book. And dang… to be fair didn’t knew a Clayman spinoff exists. But I will surely check it out. Thanks a lot (Man I am sleepy while typing this I want to write more but I am just so sleepy… so I will crash out now. SEE YA).
honestly author i recommend either rewrite the whole story from the start or maybe start with something more easier to write like Clayman spinoff . so you get more experience writing stories like that.
Geez Luis. Just came back from holiday, gonna work on a large chapter now (don’t worry won’t take long probably get it on Friday or Tomorrow) or should I publish two chapters all together, anyhow how is y’all summer break going?
Thank for the follow
that time i got reincarnated as a High Elf time travel rimuru tempest
@happymoses148 well….. when I am gonna be on the beginning of the Tenma War… I am gonna publish the first chapter of your request, just telling you it gonna be connected to this book.
Your ranking in Tensura is 69 right now.... Nice
