Icegold2004

A new chapter is up today, and it will explain why it took so long at the bottom.

Hi! I have particular R4R style but it's totally up to you because I'm not sure how well received my comments would be. I kind of list my comments throughout the chapter with both critiques (but you can definitely take it however you will because it's your story) and compliments. If you don't want the critique's then you can let me know and I'll delete them. Thanks!