IfImustIwill

I’ve continued to read a few more chapters and outside of sentence structure and punctuation (as I had previously stated) there really is no problem with your story. I love Nyna and am very curious about Azrael. I think that your language is rich and complex yet still understandable. I’m not forced to grab a dictionary every sentence or so. I also applaud you on your ability to remain in the same verb tense, something that is very hard for me. You might want to check out an author call Alexa Donne on Youtube. She gives great advice for writing. When writing, don’t try to complicate your life too much though, because then your sentences might feel a bit odd when you read them and that will definitely push your reader out of your narrative universe. I can’t convey to you enough how much I love your story :)

Thank you so much! I'm actually working on going back and reading chapters to look for such errors. It's easy to miss them first time around as I typically write super late when I'm exhausted. A terrible habit of mine haha. I will certainly take a look at your work and I'm glad you're liking the story so far! ^^

@ItsKatthological I've started to read your story and I'm happy to say that I love it. The idea behind it is really good. I have not finished it, though I will return to it when I find the time. I feel like you should work a little more on your sentence structure and punctuation because some sentences made me do a double take. Outside of that, I really enjoyed it and I'm already attached to the main character. I would love for you to read my story, and I would be more than happy to receive any constructive criticism you might have. Thank you :)