Hi! I've read the first few chapters of your story and I just want to say that I absolute LOVE it. Kotallo is one of my favorite characters and I'm so glad he is a part of this OC's story. Rivah's thought process is super authentic and refreshing from the Carja noble perspective. A suggestion I have is just a technicality of dialogue that would make the story flow better than it is.... when characters are talking, each time someone new speaks, that should signal a new paragraph. Sometimes while reading, I have to backpedal and say, "Wait, do Zo say that or did Rivah?"
Regardless, keep up the great work in bringing me back to this incredible Horizon world!
