Alright I read to where your story is now.
It's not really my type of genre, but it was interesting enough to keep me interested.
I really like your humor and I think you put a lot of thought into the dialogue.
Maybe the backstories of the main characters were revealed a bit too early and a bit too fast, but that's okay. You can make it work I think.
I quite like the characters, but I have a few issues with for example Jack.
He's a top NBA player and also the most amazing hacker in town. That could maybe be a bit too much.
Anyway, I enjoyed reading your story so far. I think I can get a feel where it is heading, but it's a bit too early to make those kind of assumptions maybe.
I myself am a writer that likes to turn predictable into unpredictable so yea, let's see.
I'm interested, keep going!
