@Casey-Vue
Wow I am so sorry, it totally looks like I blew you off on this comment. I haven't been on Wattpad for a while (I was focused on other projects) and didn't get your comment.
I think your asking about the advice I gave on your story "Stuck on VR: Legacy of Hero's"? Please correct me if I'm wrong, I want to provide accurate feed back. You also say again as though you've written to me before, but I can't for the life of me find anything... T-T
I really enjoyed the story, but I must admit it has been a while sense I've read any of it. I did skim over some recent chapters, however, and based solely on writing style, I think you have started to become more and more comfortable with characters expressing a more individual personality in their dialogue. As I mentioned in my previous comment on your work, I do think a very large majority of the page is devoted to dialogue, as aposed to action.
As for plot and narrative, you are outstanding. There just isn't anything else to say. The delivery needs work, but the concept is there.
I don't want you to take any of my criticism negatively, I think you are a talented up and coming writer, and only hope to help you succeed.
I gotta be honest here, I'm not exactly an expert on these things, and most of what I'm saying is self taught, deriving from many famous authors works, like jk Rowling. Put simply, take what I say with a grain of salt.
Keep writing if that's what you enjoy!
:3
