Dears lover death is a good book but it needs a lot of detail it has no thoughts in there minds and what the characters are actually feeling your story’s doing. point of views help a lot in story’s specially if it’s on wattpad it helps the readers on what is going on and put a few cliff hangers to keep readers interested, but other than that some regular proper punctuation and grammar mistakes happens to everyone so you should hire a editor I have a editor and she’s great she fixes all my mistakes and you need to trust them with your account here’s how it works because we are actually across the world from each other and I pay her very little to edit my books she’s great but you need to make a chart on when your editor can work because they have lives as well. Oh and if you want to talk to my editor she’s always checking the account so her name is Brooke so if you want to talk with her she can give you lots of advice of grammar and punctuation and how to start a chapter. But don’t steal her from me she’s amazing. I love her very much and she will always be my editor.
Love,
Serenity
