GayButOk
Hey, I just published chapter 2. If you want to read it, please feel free to do so
IsThatUrOverbite13
Amcadams2008
I loved the book but one thing. It got a little confusing with you switching between time lines, what I would recommend in the future is clearly highlighting the reason for the flash back, the point to looking back and bringing the memory up because that would make it a whole lot easier you follow. That is just advice from a fellow aspiring and uh published author though unless haven't posted anything. Other than that one thing the book was beautifully written. You also did an amazing job of bringing the audiences emotions into the book, I FELT what the characters felt and I was actual PRESENT in the story instead of watching from the sidelines. Again, no shade man, I loved reading this and you did a great job.
IsThatUrOverbite13
first of all THANKY YOU FOR THE MESSAGE!!
i’m so glad u were able to experience the emotions like that bc i rlly poured my heart and soul into some scenes (i was literally crying while writing that one big fight around chapter 22 and the car scene). i’m happy the ‘method writing’ paid off!
thx for the advice too, because im currently rewriting the whole thing and im at the part where the story isn’t chronological for the first time (around chapter 18).
so i have a few questionsssss >: )
- wdym by confusing? i get the part where i have to highlight what made it come up again, bc tbh i didn’t think it through back then. i just thought “oh if i don’t do a time skip, it’s gonna be boring af.”
because i did try to stay consistent with the chapter numbers, so u could read it in order if u wanted to. do u think it would be better if i put some stuff back in order in the rewrite?
- were there some characters that u think i could’ve scrapped?
- maybe stupid question but were there some parts that were just too predictable?
THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU FOR THE FEEDBACKKK ❤️❤️❤️
oh and ty for the comments (i absolutely love reading comments)
ty for complimenting writing, too <3
GayButOk
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OMG, THANK YOU FOR FOLLOWING ME I LOVE YOU BOOK ITS THE FUCKING SHIT PLEASE GIVE ME NOTES IF YOU WANT ON MY BOOK AS I WRITE IT ITS MY FIRST TIME WRITING AND POSTING I NORMALLY JUST KEEP IT TO MYSELF BUT YOURS AND A BUNCH OF OTHER BOOKS GAVE MY THE PUSH I NEEDED TO POST SO YOUR OPINION WOULD MEAN THE WORLD TO ME.
IsThatUrOverbite13
someone tell me why my fk biology teacher gave me a ZERO on homework i did do like bro i thought we was chill
IsThatUrOverbite13
nah bro she just hates me, i had to get the head teacher involved for this bish to give me the grade i deserved and even then she took 2,5 off bc i was ‘late’. it was a pair work and my duo gave our paper but she never said we had to turn it in individually and that’s how she gave me a big fat zero TT
Amcadams2008
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@IsThatUrOverbite13 ...I meant have the most potential. Not behoove the most potential. Fuck tiny keyboards!
Amcadams2008
@IsThatUrOverbite13 maybe you did it in the wrong format depending on what you the homework was. And anyways teachers are always harder on students that they behoove have the most potential. Just saying man.
IsThatUrOverbite13
LAST CHAPTER + EPILOGUE OUTTT
PLS VOTE I LOVE U GUYS
IsThatUrOverbite13
NEW PART OUTTTTTT (it’s the second to last one, i don’t want it to be over yetttttt..)
hope u guys enjoy!! :3
IsThatUrOverbite13
dropping a chapter in about one hour !! :)
IsThatUrOverbite13
do yall prefer shorter chapters with more frequent updates or longer ones and waiting longer?
IsThatUrOverbite13
wassup yall
sorry if im super unresponsive im currently on a 10 days boot camp but i do get notifications from ur votes and comments, thank u so so much for ur support <3
IsThatUrOverbite13
another chapter out :))
