@little__red__99 Sorry it took me so long to respond, but I did start reading your story, I like how you kept your characters list to a minimum cause its one of the things I actually wanted to change from mine, since a few people told me it could get confusing. An advise that I think might help the readers understand the story better is if you try and separate the lines each character says away from their thoughts and actions so its not all bundled up in a paragraph, maybe not all the time but most of it. And I personally like to change from one character's POV to another's so it keeps the story more interesting and the way you do it really does just that :)
