@Tophatauthor nah no problem, i haven't really been active on here because of school.
But about your story, it is a good plot. I stopped reading at chap 4,as its not my style as i dont like a story out of a ocs pov. But i have some tips for as far as i got. You should use more punctuation like dots and comma's. Also when someone screams use ! instead of using caps, well except if its all might then its fine. The rest i thought was fine.