Haii Chelsea! I just finished reading the whole story (uh-huh you saw my comments °-°) and here is what I think 'bout it:
The story's AMAZING!!!! It has a few misses here and there but it's totally GREAT! Also, you have a few spelling mistakes (but that kinda doesn't matter -_- )... I WUV YUV STWOWY!!!!
That's it.. Hehe... Haha... Hi... Ok I'll stop -_-
BAII! ❤