SilwyaIsForsaken
Hey I think your creepypasta fic has major potential my guy, I’ve written a few and read hundreds so if you need any advice I would love to help god knows I have the free time. Keep up the good work I can’t wait for book 2-
JDKins01
xXYuukieXx
@ JadeyKins01 Hey Jadey^^,
Its me again. I saw your post on the second book of your creepypasta story and i have some suggestions.
I hope i am Not to annoying with my suggestions.
First of all, i love this book (even more after the changes you made!) and hope i can be of help!
In my initial idea (when y/n's child was still a thing) i thought of the child as a Story macguffin to keep going with the plot, but the child no longer exists....
BUT i still think (and i think you already have a plot surrounding this) having some higher form of evil as the main antagonist. Like somebody as strong as slender, maybe even a melenium old rivalry. And sally only ran away because she had that thing following her, trying to access slender mansion. That thing maybe wants to feed off of slenders power through his proxies.
You could also bring in the beginning arc with the gentlemens Club with this idea and connect it later with the new or main story. I have two suggestions that could go together or you could also use them seperatly:
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Thats all i have right now but if you want more or something diffrent just ask i have literally nothing else to do at this point. I also have many ideas for Natalie (if you want her in the story but dont know what to do with her. I kinda liked the fact that y/n had a 'friend' back at the Club and because she did not seem to have any Real friends outside the mansion i thought she could be far more than a character in the beginning arc.)
As of now i still love your writing style and please dont abandon this book even if you take Breaks! And please take them if you feel like you need them.
I am sorry also. I know you said to post this in the comments but wattpad would not let me. I have written everything in my notes so i just copy it to here and by my life, wattpqd did not allow this big paragraph being posted in the comments.
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-Meanwhile, y/n is on her healing journey. She reconnects with her family (maybe natalie) and tries to live outside the mansion abit. Also maybe staying with her grandparents for a bit to regain some of her mental strength and sorting out her memories. Her grandparents try to make he life as comfortable as possible.
-still some effects of the trauma shine through. Intensive cleaning, make-up to Cover her scars, only wearing long sleeved clothing. Maybe this should be shown subtle. (I am in no shape or form a psychiatrist but i have my fair share of trauma so i understand some of the actions i am describing here. Still everybody lives through trauma on their own and not everyone has had the same circumstances or happanings so please dont come after me:)). The subtle ways of her behaviour could not be noticable to everyone and herself atfirst and that is the scary part. It changes you without you being in control. A minor Detail changes in her surroundings and y/n has a Panik attack.
-here comes Natalie into play: she gets in contact with y/n and they talk. Natalie has lived through the constant abuse far longer then y/n and could help her dealing with her situation. They meet up for Coffee and she helps getting y/n go outside more. Natalie could be a big part in y/ns healing journy. Also a big part in the story (the suggestions i made in the earlier proposal).
-Through sally or y/n though the entity could grab hold of the pastas location. Even finding the weakest to use. Hoodie. Hoodie is fighting with the entity in his head, fighting over cotrol of his body. Masky will be trying to help him but it seems noone really can. Except maybe just maybe a normal mortal being called nathan (yes i like their little love story right now and i dont care what the others say hehe. So i like it dramatic who cares?). In the end nathan offers to make a Deal with the entity to save hoodie but it could cost him something?
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-After finding y/n life settles for a tiny bit but not for long. Hoodie is getting weaker by the day and sallys sudden outburst and paranoia have made some of the pastas uneasy.
-Y/n is first kept under lock and key but after a while she asks the pastas to see her family. The pastas and nathan (who has to pull some strings at the police staion) make up a plausible explanation for y/ns sudden revival.
-the explanation goes as follows: she was kidnapped by a human trafficing Ring and they had a dead girl looking like y/n who they exchanged her with before she was found by the police. Jane and her cousin where in on that and helped the Ring traffik her. Y/n was then, falsly, burried.
-most of the people in town bought it because of the evidence with the gentlemens Club. (You could also say that the grave robbers have unearthed the grave and they 'found' further evidence when the checked the 'body' for DNA of the robbers but they actually 'found out' that the DNA was not matching with y/ns. Also as evidence presented to the public)
-slenderman on the other hand did not return to the mansion at first as he feels a known and dangerous presence near them. He is out searching for evidence of said presence. This also impacts hoodie alot.
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MacKenzie139045
You don't have two but can you make a part2 of creepypasta × reader plssss
I'm already almost finished it in a day and I would really like it two have more parts
Plssssss and thank you I understand completely if you don't want to
SydneyJones293
Hey are the creepypasta going after mick now to beat him up for sell her it wood been good to beat his ass
SydneyJones293
@SydneyJones293 hey have you see this app it have great story for you to listen and maybe it might give you ideas https://wehearfm.com/book/732-the-slave-mated-to-the-packs-angel/IPA0FV
BuUuNnGeEeeGuUuMmMm
First of all, I want to apologize if my English might not be grammatically correct. It's not my first language
But yeah... I wanted to ask if the second book is published already because I really liked the first one and it was one of my favorite storys^^ I rarely find any realistic CP storys:d
BuUuNnGeEeeGuUuMmMm
@ JadeyKins01 sorry that I reply this late but I haven't seen your message so yeahhh... And I wanted to say that the first chapter ist already really good Your writing style is just amazing ;D
JDKins01
No I’m still working on it I’m afraid I’m suffering writers block but will be posting chapters soon!
JDKins01
Hey guys, so I’m struggling to get the book 2 of what makes you beautiful started so if anybody has any ideas they would like interpreted into the story to get it going then give me a message! Or share it here!
xXYuukieXx
@ JadeyKins01 Thank you. I just love your story and I cant wait to see it continued... my offer still stands. If you need help, you can always ask:)
JDKins01
@xXYuukieXx WoW! That was amazing to read! I will definitely interpret this into the story and will be happy to give you credit! You’re very talented!
xXYuukieXx
@ JadeyKins01 -Keep in mind, this is just what I imagine. You could try an entirely diffrent approach. This is my opinion and my personal approach to a sequel to an amazing book i loved reading, so i took alot of time and effort in this advive(s). If you, Jadey or who ever likes what i wrote, want further help or idears to/for certain scenes, chapters, characters or entire books u could always massage me.
[If there are any spelling errors, please forgive me><. I am from germany and the autocorrection hates english. I am very sorry that it is so long×-×) !!!THIS IS NOT MEANT TO CRITISIZE THE AUTHORS WRITING IN ANYWAY!!! sorry if it does><
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I_LoveFood13
Hello Jadey! I read your creepypasta story about were Y/N died, I wanted to ask.. Will there be a sequel. That book was so good, it had me in tears.
JDKins01
Hello everyone! I’m alive and have started to finally get my new Creepypasta x Reader book in action! It is currently now being written so be sure to look out for updates on ‘Hunting the Prey’ ! Enjoy the rest of your day/night <3
(There will be major TW’s in this story, read description)
mpanzer
I just wanted to let you know how much I love your book that you finshed and can’t wait to read the second book ( and can’t wait to read both of them too!)
xXYuukieXx
Hey Jades, I noticed that u continued Ur Creepypasta Story, but it seems that it vanished from Wattpad. I was just wondering if u are okay... If i am annoying just say so, but i just love your story and i would like to see it being continued :)
JDKins01
Yes don’t worry it’ll be back! I’m just rewriting and rethinking the plot before I release it don’t worry! <3