@JadahParker2
Sorry for not updating in a long while, I've been dealing with some stuff having to do with my mental health and haven't been able to write because of severe writers block. I plan to update a new chapter soon, but I can't guarantee anything yet.
Ok! I read it, and I feel like you did well. It’s very close to feeling “ rushed”, but it’s really not. There us a lot to unpack here, but goodness! Was I ever so blithely advising you about moving the story forward?
You have done exactly that, and done it so very, very well - now I am all invested! Who is the ex- fiancé? Why has he shown up after all this time? What dreadful thing did he do? The spell casting! The mana. The testing - it’s all so intriguing.
Keep writing.
You’re doing great.
Please let me know what you think about the latest chapter? I feel like I rushed my story's progress a little.
Ohhhh! What a treat! I arrive home after a long day, and see that you have posted an update! Hurray!
…And don’t forget your mantra - “ Does it move my story forward”?
Also, remember to enjoy your craft. You have total control of your world here. You can literally insert “ fight scene” , then jump ahead to write what happens after, then come back to it.
Perhaps writing an ‘after ‘ scene will help you get a better handle on how the actual fight should have been portrayed - or just write a fun scene , one that you are looking forward to. Whenever I get stuck, I write something fun , then come back to the difficult bits later. I personally hate writing killing/ suffering. But it’s necessary, so I do it. But usually after I have written a fluffy or sensual scene , lol. I hate killing my darlings…haha.
Help! I don't know how to write a fight scene without it sounding cringy.
Hello author. Think about the outcome / objective of the story. What do you wish to tell the reader with your fight scene? Are you letting us know about an enemy? Showing us the strength of a villain? Or are you showing a hard won skill of a hero? Or is it a competition between two hero’s/ protags, where you want to highlight a difference or show a harmonious development. Are they using weapons or magic? If so what kind? We’re they born with this skill or were they taught? What is the relevance of showing a battle or fight early on ? Keep your end goal in mind and then just write it. No matter how cringy. Don’t let it stop you! If you write it, we will read! Lol Remember , the joy of Wattpad type platforms is you can always delete a scene or edit later, keep going! Fighting! You got this.
I apologize if I am being intrusive. I wish only to encourage you to continue. Best of luck. I wish you all the best in your writing journey! I look forward to reading it. Have a great day. :)
Oh that’s good Ah, I’m so pleased you are not offended:) I have followed+ saved your story to reading list. I will look forward to your updates! Huzzah!
@Kingsrabbit You're not being intrusive at all. I welcome any and all advice you have to give to a novice writer like me.
Something I find helpful in attacking a work is to write it first on my laptop and then I straight up copy the work by writing the whole thing over when I add a new chapter to Wattpad. It’s a perfect time to check / edit. I literally re type it. But hey! Part of the reason I do this is because I am afraid of losing a piece of work in the transfer attempt. Then I found it to be so helpful, lol.
Between “ From the night before”. And “ I take a deep breath”. You may wish to avoid “ walls of words”, lol. It’s only a suggestion. I would hit enter there, because it’s between the action of thinking and doing. Did I mention I love your description of Baldur?
Keep writing! It sounds like you have a good story in mind. I want to read it, lol. My suggestion is to simply to hit “ enter” after any longer descriptions, just to break up the “ voice” of the protagonist,
It is easier to read a work if there is some visual separation between the “ actions”. I will look again and give you an example of where you might want to hit enter.
I love the cover of your book. The premise sounds wonderful. I will want to read this 100%. Putting it on my “ to read” list!