Ok gurl I See You is on point. But a few critiques from your best friend, Grace Santiago !!
1. Dad is capitalized
2. Use commas more
3. Try to spice up the dialogue, it's kinda choppy.
4. SPOILER ALERT!!!!! You should probably go deeper into the backstory of the abuse. Maybe do some research into actual domestic violence
5. Try to get more into setting, like describe the houses and the school and Anna's room and stuff like that. It makes the story more connectable.
A few compliments
1. I don't read romances. At all. I maybe I just read this because you gave me the draft in Math class, but honestly it's really good and I'm loving the characters
2. Poor Anna. I hope she doesn't die, cuz she was kind of my queen. Plus, her father is the devil.
3. The conflict with the characters are actually believable, and I can feel myself getting sucked into the stories setting. It's great.
4. I really like the way you're capable of building suspense and tension (Mrs. ward). Like at the end of chapter 2 OMG I was so nervous as to what was going to happen.
5. You have great narrative skills and your descriptions are on point.
Ok I'm done.
