Rox-kun3
Hello JasminePosey. I am Rosie-chan3 but you can call me Rosie for short. I am a reader of A Discorded love and I love to give you some feedback on how I feel about it. And how I don't like the ending of A Discorded love. I will be as nice as possible about this.
1. You made me fall in love with the world and relationship of the characters to just have it be all a dream.
2. You ruined Discord's growth as a character. To a kind and protective husband and dad and a being who knew how to have a little bit of fun to a possessive husband that was willing to kill some pony over a kiss and hurt Maria in the process of doing so. You gave him no more redeeming traits.
3. We leave the magical world by Chaos and Random falling off a roof and Maria falling with Random and hitting her head on the ground and waking up in her own world and ending the book like that.
I had accepted that Maria was going to be in the My little Pony world forever but instead you make Discord unlikable and have Maria wake up from a coma and find out it was just a dream.
I was there for the romance and drama but found that there was no happy ending. If your going to write a story about romance and drama then you need a happy ending. And I feel that the "It was just a dream" thing is over use.
That is all, good day.
Rox-kun3
Thank you for understanding my feedback.
I understand that you were young at the time of writing this book. I myself am a young writer at 14. So I understand the story won't be as good as if you were to rewrite it. But thank you for answering my feedback. Well bye for now and stay Rosie! XD
JasminePosey
@Rosie-chan3 Thank you for your feedback! Please keep in mind that I originally wrote this when I was 13 and was still quite new to writing. I am 22 now and have gained a better grasp of writing. Coming from experience, not all stories have a happy ending. In regards to the "dream" ending, the sequel (Hearts as Strong As Chaos), the story actually goes on to *SPOILER* say that it was actually not a dream, and goes on to explain that Maria was sent back to the human world to properly treat the injuries she sustained in the fall. Again, I was really young, and I just wanted a really dramatic cliffhanger to end the story on. I don't intend to finish this story anytime soon, but there is some content still available for the time being. Overall, this is a very old story, and there are some things I would change if I were to rewrite it. I don't intend to do so, however, so I'm afraid this story will remain as is. I won't apologize for writing what I felt to be right at the time :) Please don't misunderstand, I am truly grateful for your feedback. The fact that people are still reading this story years later is mind-blowing to me. I still hope you were able to find some satisfaction in the story as-is. If not, I completely understand. I hope you're able to find a story that is able to meet your tastes