I just finished reading and it's so good and I NEED more. Lol. There are some grammer mistakes but this is for fun so it didn't bother me. I could if you wanted point out some errors to help make you an even better writer but only if you want. Again loved it! You definitely convey emotions with your word choices.
@Faelyn_14 Oh, of course! And no problem. You're a great writer and I would be happy to give some tips. I left some in the comments next to the parts where there were some common mistakes. Can't wait for the next part! :)