Ms. Freezee

hi. :) be the first reader of my new story. :) http://www.wattpad.com/story/3089766-inconsistent-match
          
          pls. i need suggestions and critics about my writing skills. :) 

          
          
          Magandang gabi po. PREMIER CHAPTER lang po.
          
          http://www.wattpad.com/9138399-beauty-of-the-dark-chapter-1-heartache?d=m
          
          PaVOTE or PABASA naman po. It'll help a lot.
          Favor will be entertain of my MESSAGE BOARD.
          
          
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