jianne_rize

Hey, thank you a lot for the follow

Hey, your story is interesting and unique, even refreshing with the different personas which more of less sounds like people in real life. But you're descriptions can use more depth and the story could do with more substance and strong emotion in not only the plot but the writing itself. In future chapters or stories you should write them and make sure they mean something to you. You've got potential. You're good. I hope you know that.