Jinx-01
I am not good at writing blurbs but they are important.
So here we go. Book 2, the sequel to The Empty ones has a title (At least for now. Might change.)
Feel free to have opinions on what I should change or is lacking.
The Powerful Few
"Escaping felt like being born again but having to die first.
Zaretha is still dreaming of flames several nights after she fled the fire in the brothel and left the capital behind.
Surviving was a miracle all together, but in this case the miracle has a name and brought with it, own problems.
Where to now? Far away but where? To Tajir where she would like to be or anywhere else to not bring war to the door of the people she cares about?"
XannaLurel
@Jinx-01 I think not bad, but maybe to start with something like "Before being born again, she had to die first..." Maybe remove "several nights after", "altogether", "in this case", so it to be more dynamic. Where to go now?
jambudweep
@Jinx-01 Neither am I very good at this. But from what I've understood so far, the core purposes of a blurb are to create curiosity, set the tone, and introduce the central conflict. And honestly, the one you've written is doing its job well. The opening line, from my perspective, reflects the circumstances Zara has gone through in the first book and subtly leads into her journey at the beginning of the second. The following two paragraphs help establish the tone of the story, and the final one builds curiosity effectively. So overall, I think it's working. That said, as you continue writing, things will become clearer, and you can always tweak it accordingly. :))
