I read your story before it disappeared and wrote some feedback on it, when I tried posting it it said the part couldn't be found. Ether way, here is what I wrote for the story part.
I'm liking the concept, haven't read a first person story before and I'm looking forwards to reading more. I'm new at writing but what little feedback I can give, maybe have more descriptions from Aaliyah to what's happening, maybe including more on how they are feeling in the moment more and describe the scenery a little more? Just what little advice I can give and what I've learned in the past several months. All in all though, I like the story so far!
