Jlkhurd

After a long hiatus from writing, I finally posted a news chapter.  Here is the link:  https://www.wattpad.com/1028995735?utm_source=ios&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_writing&wp_page=create_writer&wp_uname=Jlkhurd&wp_originator=kSEGJ9HRPNHvHaqL6hf2Af0760gVGs0FMpaJ406XoatnNlunLJ65S6C%2BGGhGBdHBUotidGfmMtaR%2Fk50k0kk4ha6y4%2BfmyFI3At6VSCOxf0ToUc%2B0ynWYw96ixsR%2FppV

Jlkhurd

I am just letting you know that I heard from a judge's critique of my book that it lacked emotion and that the character did not seem real.  I thanked the judge, I edited the prologue and first three chapters.  For those who have been reading my book regularly, please read the first 4 chapters and let me know if it is better than before.  I appreciate all feedback and work to improve this book each time.  It must be the perfectionist in me. LOL.

Jlkhurd

I will be editing and fixing more chapters in my book.  I am uploading it onto Microsoft Word and fixing all errors, and then reposting it  with corrections.  The stories do not change much.  I also changed chapter numbers.  I decided to make the father and son a prologue because it is a background chapter leading up to the main story which is when John gets on the boat and travels to the colonies, gets married and has a family.  I also added stories and the love stories of his children because they are a family.  Each surviving child gets married at some point in John's life.  This book mentions real people and facts that happened to the characters.  I have been researching each child and formulating stories based on what I have .  The next section will deal with Benjamin and Jacob.   I am so excited.  FYI, My husband is from Jacob's line, so he will have a lot of book time along with his children.  I am planning a set of sequels dealing with the grand children  and beyond.