Hey! I just finished reading chapter 1 of your story. It pokes my interest. I love the genres, the terminologies you used and others, but tbh I think you need to work more on your characters hehe. Give them their own identity kase napansin ko sa chapter 1 pa lang na medyo tagilid sila sa sarili nilang characteristics. Like kung paano sila magreact sa isang bagay, yung way nag pagsasalita nila and others but all in I can sa na may future to hehe.
(Sorry sa pagiging critic ko sorry talaga. I hope it doesn't offend you ina way)
