@TrevSG Hi Trevor,
I found the time to read your story today.
There were many things that I liked. I liked how you used a minimalist writing style and precise choice of words to create drive in the story. I also thought you did a good job of conveying the stylish atmosphere. The highlights were the descriptions of nature (the descriptions of the coast, when they drive to the hospital, stuck in my mind).
My favorite part was the party on the yacht where Enzo's body is found. The chapter has a good dramaturgy. From this point on, the story had me gripped.
Personally, I would have liked more dialogue between the characters to have a stronger emotional connection to them. After the chapter where the body turns up, that improves.
I hope I was able to help.
With best regards,
Jonathan
