Jolie Haaf

@audu2030 thank you by the way I really appreciat your review

@audu2030 thank you I'll do some re editing to fix it 

@audu2030 hey so I read some of it and it is good for the most part it just didn't really hook me like it should but if you were to fix that it could be a really good story. I loved the outline for it tho really best kind of outline I have read in a while