Femdan
Hey, I was going to ask if you were willing to read Airport Connection. Can you let me know what you think? I trashed a couple chapters last night and I think I’m going to trash the first one too, as the story is going in another (hopefully better) direction than I originally planned
JonasMirs
@Femdan Oh! That's so ironic, I started it already. I see what you mean. The first chapter is fine, but it does seem a bit like a prologue almost. I like the idea of going back in time and telling the story, but chapter two seems different/disconnected a bit. I thought we'd start with the story teller narrative in chapter 2 before shifting more into a flashback option. That said, chapter 2 could be a nice start for the story on its own. I think what you have is really good though, and I enjoy your writing voice, so I think whatever you do will work well ❤
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