@Princess__LC I looked at it and I think you're doing a very nice job! I'm really impressed that you decided to dedicate yourself to writing a full book, that's a really big commitment. I like how you compared the different characters to actors in the beginning to give the reader an idea of what they look like, it will really help to bring the book to life! If there's one small suggestion I could give it would be to be a little more careful with your grammar. I know it's boring but errors in sentence structure can interrupt the flow of a book and make it go more slowly for readers, even if they don't realize it. Keep up the good work! I look forward to what you write next!
