Joshpoetry

Hey guys sorry for the delay. part 4 of passengers on a falling plane is out.
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          Hey I'm kia, If you like reading a poem you can try this collection of poems showing a human flow of emotion and I would love to get your feedback or any story you want to share ....I love to experiment with my writing skills....and get inspired ....thank you. And sorry for popping up without your permission.

Joshpoetry

@kiapoetry_ Hey, I read a few of your poems, especially the collection When Water is a Human. I really like the emotional direction you’re going in.
            ‘Still Here’ stood out to me a lot—the imagery and metaphors really land, and I liked lines like ‘always searching for Mr. What's Right, maybe he knows where my sunshine is’. That was a strong image.
            I also like how you use repetition—it makes the emotions feel more real and heavy in a good way.
            I think some parts could be tightened or pushed a bit deeper so they hit even harder, maybe with more intentional pauses and line breaks.
            But overall, your writing feels authentic. I could honestly see this working really well in spoken word—you’ve got that kind of presence in your writing. I like what you’re building.
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