Hey @Jules_Haigler,
I just finished reading this piece and I was completely drawn in. The opening instantly builds tension that first line with the abuelita’s glare sets such a vivid, almost magical realism tone. The writing balances folkloric warmth and suburban horror perfectly. The pacing is cinematic: from the quiet 1:08 AM setup to the slow revelation of the mirror, it reads like a short film unfolding in candlelight.
The imagery is fantastic broken glass in her hair, the glowing mirror, the mysterious voice saying “It was me.” It all feels both intimate and eerie, like a childhood memory twisted into a ghost story. I love how the story leaves you wondering if it’s supernatural or psychological. The atmosphere really sticks with you.
On a creative note:
I’m actually an illustrator and visual artist, and your story instantly sparked several visual ideas from the mirror’s glow to the haunting portrait of Hope with shards of glass in her hair. I specialize in book covers, character illustrations, scene art, comic-style panels, and full e-book publishing support (including layout, proofreading, and even audiobook adaptation).
If you’re open to it, I’d love to create a small concept piece inspired by this scene so you can see how the mood could translate visually no obligation at all. If you ever decide to adapt your story into a full illustrated e-book or want a cinematic-style cover, I’d love to collaborate. I also offer flexible pricing and partial-payment options for indie authors to make things manageable.
Feel free to DM me here or share your preferred way to connect. I’d be happy to send some examples of similar atmospheric pieces I’ve done. Either way, this story has such strong visual potential. I’d love to see it reach even more readers!
Best,
Olivia