Chapter 1 is finally out! Please be as harsh as you can in your comments (not being sarcastic). I want you to knit pick every detail down to the last comma. Tear it apart into tiny, little, degraded pieces. I want to know every part that erks you, makes you cringe, or just makes you laugh.
What one might call harsh criticism I like to call constructive feedback. So, lay it on me you heartless net-izens.
GIVE ME EVERYTHING YOU GOT!