@Jurrah
When was the last time you have read the funniest opening chapter in the history of literature? Would you believe it took me 3 years to write the first page? But when I finished, what a pandora box I have opened up. I couldn't stop laughing. If you have a sense of humour, check Superpower. Read enjoy and follow. I will do the same for you
Moyai they swing in the wind
What's popping bitches I'm back, and im remastering my books, currently on chapter 3 of the doom book, each chapter will at least have 1000 words each, maybe a little more if I'm feeling generous.
-jurrah
Feeling cute today, might make another book
I'm finna droo kick the CEO of Corona virus
Just uploaded a new chapter for a book for the first time in like 3 months, so yea. Check it out I guess
@Jurrah ok, so I just read chapter 5 and chapter 6 and I honestly like both these chapters and I believe their possibly the best chapters you've made so far but I'm going to tell you something very important. Spacing is needed, specially toward the end of chapter 6 where their was literally no spacing at all, it was when you were describing your fight scene between Doom Guy and Nikos. The problem is that people get tired and exhausted when reading such long paragraphs so spacing helps you with that I should also suggest in using more commas and periods. Lastly in chapter 5 with the conversation between Ozpin and Glynda you escalated the tension way too quick, you have to build up to arguments specially when you use them in all caps LIKE I DO, lol. But overall I do see improvement with your chapters and hopefully later down the line you can be better then me. Because I'm a uncreative hack but anyway 6/10 not bad but not great either, it's decent.
You know what grinds my gears, when your shopping at your local grocery store and a mom starts to call you out because you bought milk and some cheese to make some grilled cheese and a glass of milk while watching saving private Ryan like We FUCKING GET IT BRENDA WERE THE ONLY SPECIES TO DRINK MILK AFTER INFANCY WE ARE ALSO THE SPECIES TO DRINK KALE BROCCOLI SMOOTHIES AND GO ON A SUNDAY RUN SO GO BACK TO YOUR FAILING MARRIAGE
All right I'm back I've been gone for a while I know but I'm back and a story as followed with my return
Thanks for the follow!
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