KabirSingh808

so i have a problem here can someone help me as i am not unable to save my story for some reason i don't know what is happening but it says that "we seem to have had trouble saving your story" and i cant even publish it somehow.

Shikunome

i pust ome of my idea on memo app but i dont  know if can copy whole story but atleast i can copy need just need to do copy them  each by each not whole
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Shikunome

thats what im doing when im putting some of my idea
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Shikunome

@KabirSingh808 hmm if you cant not why not copy paste and put that on memo app for temporary something might problem in wattpad
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VordBoi_248

Hello! Can I ask you smting?
          
          How would you rate this Fanfic I made?
          
          ?/10
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/391845634?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_reading&wp_page=reading&wp_uname=VordBoi_248

KabirSingh808

@VordBoi_248 and then there is his daughter Rylas, considering how her past life went before reincarnation I thought she would have been more introvert and detached from others, not believing others easily and it could have been a good plot that Rimuru slowly tries to win her trust by doing some things that he thought a child would like and since he has no experience being a father maybe he would have failed badly and then took help from those who are experienced in these kind of stuff and then as for shion and shuna though I don't know if it is like in anime where they are competing for Rimuru attention but if that is the case in your story too I thought they would have panicked a lot seeing Rimuru daughter and maybe asked too many questions but yeah story is intresting the thing that I thought is lacking is deep emotions and it's expression
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KabirSingh808

@VordBoi_248 I haven't read it completely but here is my take on what I have read so far it seems that the tone of your story is more friendly rather than professional,well that is good since it depends on author how he or she wants to write their story, anyway so story is good and intresting but I feel like the emotional part is lacking for example in first chapter when Rimuru came to know that he had a daughter well i mean she was born from his magicules but anyway the suprise element is lacking even though you write how he is surprised and all but it could have more emotional and deep it finished too fast
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VordBoi_248

@KabirSingh808 so... How is it?
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Rimuru_Nova

Do you know Tensura's system? Rimuru, in his current state, has two of the most broken Ultimate Skills. Azathoth: God of the Void and Shub-Niggurath: God of Abundance  And Ciel, who is a Manas, and a Manas, mind, you, is in the same category as a True Dragon. Meaning that the True Dragon and Manas race is the strongest and rarest race in all of existence. And Rimuru himself is a True Dragon. And by the Light Novel's 22nd volume, he effortlessly absorbed Milim's full-powered Drago Nova, showing that he surpassed even her at a large margin due to constantly absorbing Turn Null when he was still in the End of Space-Time.