webbiegail

Good morning! 
          
          I have a quick favor to ask as you’re reading the first few chapters of What the Hunt Requires. The original version was written in third person like What the Season Demands, but I’ve now rewritten the first five chapters in first person.
          
          Does that work better for you as a reader?
          
          Also, the tone in those early chapters is slightly different from the original version. Does the new tone still feel right for the story/characters? I really value your opinion, so any thoughts you have as you read would help me a ton. 

KarenSampson

I think you are really a truly talented writer and both ways works and I think you will give me the clarity of the small confusion I felt in the beginning which had nothing to do with whether in first person or 3rd!  
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KarenSampson

I was slightly confused by who were these other characters but you pulled it together pretty well!  Her boyfriend  from station are you going to show or tell what happened to him or did he just die when station exploded?  What happened to his sister who got into a ship oh wait she contacted vi right and crashed I’m a little confused by what’s going on I guess I will reread it and let you know more sorry 
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indig0jesse

          
          
          I don’t usually do this, but you need to meet NEW HAVEN.
          
          Think Arcane x Blade Runner x Six of Crows. 
          
          Cyberpunk rebellion, god-tech, betrayal, and maybe a kiss-or-kill romance.
          Seventeen chapters in. Sh*t’s unraveling fast.
          
          You won’t regret it. ❤️
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/394431512?utm_source=ios&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details&wp_uname=indig0jesse
          

fleuresmell

Hi! I'm Fleur Mell, the author of The Hookup Pact. I'm reaching out to you because I have seen you in the comments section of my books and I could really use the help of readers like you who could offer constructive feedback. I was wondering if you would be willing to fill out a feedback form? Your feedback would be of immense help to me in improving my craft and writing a better story. 
          
          Let me know if you would be up for it! Hope you have a great day ahead!
          
          Fleur. 

fleuresmell

@KarenSampson Hi! I just wanted to check in to see if you were considering this? There’s no pressure at all and it’s absolutely fine if you don’t want to participate. Just let me know if you are still interested :) 
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martykate1

Hi Karen! I really want to thank you for adding my story "The Boy From The Band" to your reading list. I really believe in this story and struggle to find re find readers. I've had some nice compliments from people who've read it and hope someday  it finds an audience like "So I Married a Rockstar" has!

KC_Han_writes

thanks for the reading list add! just a heads up, i saw you put Love at First Spark in a sci-fi reading list; it's not a sci-fi book but rather is a romance :D

KarenSampson

Those are my current must reads lol I just putt it in that folder because I really was not wanting to forget to  read it!! Thank you though 
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martykate1

I was wondering if you'd be interested in reading my story, "The Boy From The Band". It's about Rick Danko of The Band. It's different from "So I Married a Rockstar" but I've been told it's good and I think you might enjoy it. Thank you in advance!
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/199054846-the-boy-from-the-band
          
          The Boy from the Band
          Dacy is pretty, intelligent, driven, and smart enough to know to avoid a complication with a married man--until she meets Rick. Rick is the bass player of The Band. When she hung outside the studio where he was rehearsing she didn't expect him to take an interest in her. But the handsome, funny, charming, and married Rick falls for the girl with brown hair and dreamy brown eyes. He seduces her wi...

martykate1

I was wondering if you'd be interested in reading my story, "The Boy From The Band". It's about Rick Danko of The Band. It's different from "So I Married a Rockstar" but I've been told it's good and I think you might enjoy it. Thank you in advance!
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/199054846-the-boy-from-the-band
          
          The Boy from the Band
          Dacy is pretty, intelligent, driven, and smart enough to know to avoid a complication with a married man--until she meets Rick. Rick is the bass player of The Band. When she hung outside the studio where he was rehearsing she didn't expect him to take an interest in her. But the handsome, funny, charming, and married Rick falls for the girl with brown hair and dreamy brown eyes. He seduces her wi...