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Critic Please
          
          
          Username: Mathias2001
          
          Title: Memory Island(One Piece) 
          
          Harshness: 6/10
          
          The straw hats crew finally sailed to a new island and a glad about it, but not for long. Problems keep arriving and Memory from the past and deja-vu stuff keep arriving. But things don't stop there as a highly trained organisation called the CP10 are in that island and are causing conflits and even more problems, even Merry return create another one. But the question at the end Is the straw hat crew will leave the island with the same number as before?
          
          
          Other peoples come in the island for differents reasons including Marines, Shishibukais, Pirates, Revo, Mage from fiores and Ninjas from the Leaf and Sand Village,Others...

I need a critic, pls!
          
          Username:WhenIFinallySawYou
          
          Title:Can't Remember To Forget You
          
          Chapters to be Critiqued: 3
          
          Harshness 10
          
          Details:What do you do when you find out you are something special?
          
          That is the one and only question that lies in Kylene's heart. 
          
          Separated from her past, she believes that she's been home schooled all her life, with no one for company other than her self, and her weird friend, Nayomi Perez.
          
          The first moment she steps into the halls of North East High, she discovers that things may not be the same.
          
          At day, a stalker (who calls herself _xoxo143) awaits at every corner. At night, weird haunting dreams come in pursuit of her memories.   
          
          Yet, what happens when you find out your parents have a secret so huge?
          And what happens when everything you know about your life is a lie?
          Also, what if you find out the reason for all these problems is yyour best friend and your boy friend?

jeez ur good at drawing and writing! Ur could probably make a manga all by urself! and thanks for following!