Hey after leaving my house I finally got a chance to read your story. It had a great plot and was all around great, but there were a few things I caught in reading it here is a list of what I found (srry if it is long it is only 8 things I just like explaining and making it easy for you to find.)
1: in the prologue the sentence "The soldats found no remorse for their viel actions." you should change viel to evil or vile whichever one suits your story best.
2: Also in the prologue, you said (not word for word) the survivors trampled over the dead being ( this is in there) limps I think the word you meant was limbs.
3: When Madaline insisted her mother to tell her what was wrong she said it with anger rising in her voice not angry.
4:(3 in 1) When walking to the hospital with Tobias in her arms the car should have sped down the road not speed. If you were trying to say something else you may want to re-word the sentence.After the almost car accident Tobias tightens against her chest. Who exactly let out the sigh of relief. if it was Tobias then you need to add an "s" at the end of let
5: small one when you said the kid had a staple in his finger when you said stabler did you mean staple.
6: finally when you said"It was her mother" i was a bit confused you may want to re-word the sentence or remove it so that it flows better
Thank you for letting me read and give my opinion on the story but I am only a 9th grader and I don't know everything I suggest going onto paperrater (no download all free)you have to copy and paste and doesn't catch everything like grammarly. Or like i said grammarly (download and need to make account but is aways there to watch your back on spelling, grammar, and punctuation without haveing to copy and paste. again sorry it was so long please take my advice and good luck with your story!
