KawaiiPotathoes

Offering editing for free. But not for a certain someone who tends to use enough commas to give me a headache. ;) you know who you are. It's first come first serve. Message me with the details of what you want to be done and how many chapters but I will only be editing for three people and then the offer is closed. Thank you! Have a nice day.

KawaiiPotathoes

Offering editing for free. But not for a certain someone who tends to use enough commas to give me a headache. ;) you know who you are. It's first come first serve. Message me with the details of what you want to be done and how many chapters but I will only be editing for three people and then the offer is closed. Thank you! Have a nice day.

DawnOfTheAgez

Hey I saw you were giving some critisim to a writer and I was wondering if you would read my book The Rose and give me some helpful critism. 
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/157130412-the-rose
          
          I dont know if any of your followers o the same but if you would could you share it with some of them.

KawaiiPotathoes

@DawnOfTheAgez =_=okay formalities are gone! Thanks for being chill about my criticism. A lot of writers and fans of said writers can be taken aback by it so I was a bit scared, even if you asked for it.
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DawnOfTheAgez

@KawaiiPotathoes Wow thanks so much! I hope you do enjoy it, i do agree my grammer could use some help, I also know that it is a bit rushed. However i hope as the chapters go on you see a bit of a transition, it might just be me though, thanks however for even being willing to read. You can comment in the chapters anything you think should be fixed or you would want more info on :)
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KawaiiPotathoes

@DawnOfTheAgez The only problems I really have with it are about the pacing and grammar. While the writing is very good the pacing seems a little too rushed. The book just kicks off super fast and there isn't much time before the protagonist meets her love interest. I understand if that's how you wanted it to start and while that's fine, it should have been prolonged a bit because it makes the romance really in your face. Also, the grammar isn't bad but I see a few errors. They aren't huge ones and are barely noticeable so I see why you didn't catch them. Try to look through your work a bit more and maybe try using something to help you check the grammar. Also comas, commas? I swear I suck at spelling but yeah, they are needed in a few parts of the book. But overall it is so far pretty good even two chapters in. I think I'm gonna be reading it all night.
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