Kelvin Steve

Hey! Sorry for plugging, I just want to recommend my own story. I'm gonna support your story, vote every chapters, and wait for your updates. Please do the same with my story. Thank you!❤️ The link's below. 
          
          
          https://my.w.tt/hjL42COAQ9

Hello again! So I read your book again and you've improved! • U •
          The plot is very interesting, the book is great too, but there may some things that you need to improve that I may not help with. Still, it's a great book.
          I hope it can grow to be known. 
          （・∀・）(°∀°)b

keep good work bro!

@Yasss_queenn ok i will check it out...nah spirited away is one of my favourite and yours is nc too...thanks for recommend

@Yasss_queenn do you have any recommendation for me to read it will be my pleasure

@Yasss_queenn nah i just unpublished it as i am editing again.... thanks

@Yasss_queenn you are welcome . I am writing some books too so if you are interested plz follow me back and tune on thanks

thanks for the follow!♡

Hello, I remember you asking one of us in the comment section to read your story. I don't mean to disturb but  do you mind if I tell my opinion on the story?
          
          Well, I'm just gonna tell you. First, I think you need to fix is your sentences. Please learn to combine some of your sentences, it will be easy to read for some other readers.  Also, when a character is going to speak, please remove the space between the quotation mark and the sentence. 
          Second, In my opinion, you need to learn how to seperate your sentences and make paragraphs.  For an example:
          
          "I don't understand why we're still doing this. Just please stop it. I'm not doing this, It's messing up our relationship." She said 
          To
          "I don't understand why we're doing this." Reina told her. 
          She put her left hand on her shoulder and said,"Just please stop it. I'm not doing this it's messing up our relationship!" She reasoned to her friend.
          
          I also think you need to add some action after the sentences, it helps the readers capture what is happening. 
          Thank you for your time.
          

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