If you don't mind! >-< And I hope I'm not nothing you. (If I am, I'm VERY sorry) But can you read my story: Bite and Tell: Just Another Vampire Story. I've been working really hard on it and hoped that people would find some parts of it funny. Of course the opinion of friends and family is bias, so was hoping you can assist me in criticizing my work.
I thought it would be best to ask another fellow comedic vampire writer to assist me in the job. I apologize ahead if any of the humor may be offensive.
Once more I'm going to say sorry while thanking you for at least reading my comment!