KelleyWhitehouse

Anyone want me to update?

PleaseHideMe

Yes, please continue. But, be sure that you add more detail into your paragraphs. There's more dialogue then there is writing. I like it but you should also note that when I was reading I caught the caps and the several question marks which might throw some people off on reading your story. But other than that, I like it so far. Beginners try, (I'm a beginner sorry, I sound like an idiot.) continue please! ^^