Sweetie, I just read your story and I'd like to offer a few constructive remarks. Besides the typos, you should brush on the "too, to and two" meanings. Secondly the premises set forth by the majority of werewolf books are lacking in your books. That's not an extremely bad point but it wouldn't hurt to just follow some basic rules of "human behavior" to explain the situations your describing. Especially when telling the story _ the eyes of the person having the experience. If you polish this story, I think you'd have one you could be proud of.
Just let me know if you need any help. Best of luck.
