Heeya @Krimpsten hope you're doing good, your story writing is amazing i love the way you portray your story world, keep up writing stories like this you have a good potential, I have drop some suggestion and feedback if you feel this would be something fun and can make your story world more attractive so it would be my pleasure if i could get a chance to assist you, if you're up we can discuss about this in more details over discord or insta? ^.^