@hellokittyhilyric
Hey, I’m really happy you want to hear my thoughts on your book. I have to say, it’s a different kind of fanfiction than what I usually read, and I honestly like it. Focusing on Michael’s children is pretty original, and it really works. You have a real flair for writing, and that’s something I really admire.
To be honest, for it to be absolutely perfect, you might want to work a little on the layout of your chapters. I’m not sure if it’s just me, but I see everything in one big paragraph, which makes it a bit harder to follow. Also, every word starting with a capital letter could be your style, of course, but it’s something to think about.
Overall… it looks really good to me. Keep going, girl—you’re doing great.
