Kundai-Karl

“No.”
          	“What?!” Obakin was flabbergasted, the whites of his eyes receded, as if I’d struck a cord - a forbidden note.
          	I stuck my hand into my dress, drawing a knife the size of a twig from one of its pockets. The blade was no longer than my pinkie, but its edge looked like it could cut into anything. It seemed to dare me, urging me to slay this man, telling me that it was messy but fast. 
          	
          	Hi guys sorry for not publishing for so long, been busy with life, school and other things - but - I've managed to post the first chapter to Begotten Shadow (yeah, I said it, first chapter I'm restarting the novel - I needed to work out the kinks).  Enjoy the story :) don't forget to comment - constructive criticism is ,well, constructive.
          	
          	https://www.wattpad.com/story/120845114

anndoro300

Pls write more and find more inspiration to add more culture to your world. E.g
          How do they work or teach?
          How do they communicate/travel/access information and work on their technology?
          How do they play/right/make peace?
          What is their political system like and who's in power?
          What stories/ myths/legends do they tell?
          What is their tradition?
          What is wrong or right/taboos or recommended?
          Who are the past villains or heroes? Who is forgotten?
          What are the relationships between people or clans?
          What do people love/fear/hate the most?
          What do people believe in?
          What do they eat/drink?
          What do the animals or plants like?
          How they treat their young and old?
          How does the world shape the characters and readers?
          What type of conflict will happen?
          
          I hope you find this helpful.
          P.s don't use your real name for your profile. Pls be careful, it's a messed up world out there.
          
          Your mate
          AJ from MCC

Kundai-Karl

@anndoro300  hey, thanks for the advice, I'm going to add it as the story progresses. I guess the world is pretty messed up but hey what can you do,  I'll see what I can do about it
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Kundai-Karl

“No.”
          “What?!” Obakin was flabbergasted, the whites of his eyes receded, as if I’d struck a cord - a forbidden note.
          I stuck my hand into my dress, drawing a knife the size of a twig from one of its pockets. The blade was no longer than my pinkie, but its edge looked like it could cut into anything. It seemed to dare me, urging me to slay this man, telling me that it was messy but fast. 
          
          Hi guys sorry for not publishing for so long, been busy with life, school and other things - but - I've managed to post the first chapter to Begotten Shadow (yeah, I said it, first chapter I'm restarting the novel - I needed to work out the kinks).  Enjoy the story :) don't forget to comment - constructive criticism is ,well, constructive.
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/120845114

Kundai-Karl

Gonna publish a totally new chapter, after a LONG time. Sorry for the horrendous delay #apologetic. Here's the opening paragraph:
          
          Fire trickled from a whirling mass in the south, spouting out brambles of heat and soot. Eniré was on her knees, her hands reaching out for the flowery trickling flows that were collecting at just before her. 
          
          So yeah guys, I'm back at it again - chapter 3, "Hot as Fire". Coming soon (on Thursday)
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/113782247