Laila-Marina

Thanks so much for the feedback. That's exactly what I'm here for. It's very useful and I'll be revising based on your useful input and any other criticism I may manage to rustle up, as soon as I complete some other projects (though I may not post revisions on here). So please do keep it coming!

Thanks so much for the votes. I've recently been discovering just how important votes (and comments) are to a book's rankings. Better a daily count of 12 reads, 6 votes and 3 comments than 50 straight reads and nothing else. The problem for us 'oldies' is that the over 25 readership is much less generous with these things than younger readers.
          I feel genuinely sorry for you stuck there with still only a handful of reads. Wattpad really needs to do some soul-searching as to why writers of potential and talent struggle to make it to a thousand reads while there's so much semi-literate tripe on hundreds of thousands, even millions, of reads.
          I don't want to start getting into publicising other people's books via my own as I believe this would be a turn-off to my readers. I'll certainly continue to read with interest and vote on your future chapters. I'll keep you in my library too, which only has half a dozen or so titles in it, so that any readers who check out my profile might get directed to you.
          Some advice if I may. Publishers and by extension readers look for conflict. You had this in the first couple of chapters with the main character scornful of the other woman. Since then it's all been pretty amicable. Perhaps you could rework the relationship between the main character and the Chilean guy a little, spice it up with a little animosity based on unfounded cultural prejudice. It will make their eventual romantic coming together even more pleasurable for your readers.
          Another slight problem a publisher might have is that the thriller element is progressing too slowly and seems of secondary importance to the romantic element.
          Finally, I've always thought you could do with a rethink on the title. I know you're trying to communicate both setting, genre and romantic theme, but in my opinion it's too long and comes across as a little forced.
          I hope all this was useful. Any criticism is intended as constructive and I would welcome the same.
          

Thanks for adding me to your reading list. I really appreciated your feedback yesterday and have made a few adjustments based on your comments. In the largely adolescent world of wattpad, it's important that us 'oldies' stick together and try to share any readership we can muster. (Maybe I'm wrong but from the maturity of your writing I'm asduming you're 25+)