@Laktttt
DUDE HELPPP
Could you jsut go through my stories real quick, see if there's any discrepancies or plot inconsistencies?
I just wanna make sure i dont mess anything up and upset someone cause my memory sucks a lot ;-;
I just posted something for False Persona you should probably take a look at. I wanted to let you know ahead of time but this was the only place I can contact you and it felt awkward to talk about something like that on wattpad community posts.
I’ll try to get out chapter 12 in the upcoming days but i’m a little stacked with work and basketball so I can’t give a date just yet. But luckily I do think it’s one of the better chapters I’ve ever written
@TurtleGuy22 Only just seen this man but yeah hope your alright. Thanks for letting me know, glad your doing what you feel is best over everything. Hopefully when you come back to it in the future then you'll be in a better head space I'll miss reading this though icl.
Lakttt help meeee
I really struggle with writing in first person
Like I’m unable to get the characters thoughts out fluidly
Any tips??
@Laktttt I can imagine myself as the character but writing is where I start to falter Anyways it would be great if you could mention a few fanfics with good fp pov Analysing it would help a lot ^w^ Have a good day
@Cooldude33cc I'm really not good at that lol but anyways I would say that it mostly depends on how you think yourself because that can influence how you write you're characters. You need to try imagine that characters thoughts and thought process and put yourself in their position. Method acting is similar if you want to search that up but for you I'd do that but only with your thoughts. That's quite an extreme example but besides that I would say read fanfics that have good first person in them. There's loads on my reading list anyways if you need some.
Do you have any clue which volume or chapter the S-System was revealed to the students? I’m trying to get to work on the next chapter but I want the actual dialogue and details Chabashira gave them
@TurtleGuy22 I'll give you one that is heavily focused on the romance between Suzune and Kiyotaka which is called cote bound kiyotaka x suzune It's so good, had me feeling lonely while reading it lol Next is one is a good overall fanfic Classroom of the revenge Not sure how much you could improve from it besides the exploration of Kiyotaka's abilities and mind though. The writing is good either way. (there is 2 fanfics with this title, they're both really good but the one with the cover of Kiyotaka is the one I'm currently suggesting) Other good ones that would help you in different areas Echoes of solitude I'm your choice Obligated horikita x ayanokoji Self centered tactician Classroom of the elite unfathomable power The Whiteroom Dropout Honestkouji: Classroom of the elite The angel and her devil Love trials of the introverted Just realised but I'm missing so many of the really good fanfics I've actually read because I only discovered the reading list function recently. I know you've most likely read motivated to be lazy but it's probably your best chance because of how good it is. I have many other good ones but they aren't specifically cote. That'll have to do because I can't really be asked to search any longer lol. They will do you for at least a couple months with you're schedule anyways. Let me know if you want more at a later date though or if you've read any of the ones I've just given.
@TurtleGuy22 That's a shame you've already read them ones. The only other Suzune and Kiyotaka one in that list is the last one I'm pretty sure. I'll see if I can find more that I've read and nae problem hahaha
I just added them all to my reading list, I will read them when i have the opportunity. Thank you again!
Dude my story started like 8 hours ago and its already on your reading list
@Cooldude33cc Nah I've not long turned 19 and in the UK so I've finished college. I have a very bad knee condition on both knees where they dislocate extremely easily from majority of physical activity so even if I didn't want to, I'd have to work from home when I get a job which will happen in the future so my situation will be no different and I'll have free time either way. I do my own things obviously though so I'm not always free. Without going into any deeper issues, that's the gist lol but yeah I don't know how you get through writing chapters if your the same haha, don't know if I could do it icl.
@Laktttt that last part hits hard because that’s what I’m like Also no offence, but how do you get so much free time?? Are you a stock market expert or smth? I’m at ok if you don’t want to tell tho I don’t mind
@Cooldude33cc Yeah I just enjoy reading tbh. That's all it amounts to and I have free time so when I read fanfics it's very easy to put aside a couple mins. I'd write a story but I know I'd be a perfectionist when writing so I don't do it since the first chapter alone will never get finished to my standard since I know something can always be improved no matter how small. I'd be happy to give what little feedback I can offer when I'm free though.
How was chapter 11? I know it was lackluster and most likely a disappointment because of how chapter 10 ended off but I still need an opinion on it. I know my writing was a bit worse because i’m rusty and because of that the sentences are clunkier and stuff doesn’t flow as well but other than that.
@Laktttt It’ll get up there in chapters eventually it’ll jsut take a little, my other story still has 5x the amount of reads it does so there’s a possibility for both of them to have 100k+ reads, that’s the goal atleast
@TurtleGuy22 Aye I personally think you're fic is very good although my brains perception regarding that is definitely fried because of how bad a lot of fanfics are. The low chapter count is probably what's holding it back if I were to point out the biggest thing but that will come with time. I reckon it will be one of the ones with 100k plus reads if you grind it for a good while. But yeah anyways goodnight man and nae problem.
@Laktttt I’ve honestly been trying to make my fics be one of the ones that people refer to as very good lol. I’ll definetly binge some of them if i have the opportunity too because i have a break coming up soon, anyways goodnight man thanks for all the help
I am in desperate need of your opinion, chapter 10 is 85% done but this last part is the most important and I still am not sure how a specific character would react. Obviously Im keeping spoilers out of this original message because I want to make sure you’re okay with it. This chapter will be, probably, the most important for future plans and I don’t want to post it before I’m confident on it.
@Laktttt Yeah it can definitely happen in a lot of different ways. I think I will just turn it into Kiyotaka giving more constructive criticism and light jabs but also showing his intellect and probably setting up a wager like other fics. It’ll be a lot easier and will make the actual reality check more meaningful if their relationship is farther along
@TurtleGuy22 Going the first route is quite complicated honestly. You have the base idea down so you could do it if you really wanted and I don't think it would turn out bad in any way since you probably have a more concrete idea now on how she would react. I've seen fanfics in similar spots where he threatens her to spread her legs or he smacks the shit out of her or nearly expels her or humiliates her. There's so many different ways it can be done because Kiyotaka is mentally cracked in the head when he's not acting with 2 personas. The mask in this fanfic and his so called normal personality covering his white room one. So you have many choices in your approach and I understand you want the readers to like it so it's harder to pick as well. If you separate them as you said then you have more content and because their relationship would have developed by the time he destroys her mentally then it will be a whole lot more impactful.
@Revenge_Genius Yeah when I have time I may do it, my sleeping pattern is all over the place so the replies may be extremely long in wait sometimes.
@Revenge_Genius Aye I think it was good man. It was funny but at the same time serious, especially that ending. I quite like Horikita as a character when she's already had character development so it was really good and unexpected but a bit personally disappointing. That's just personal bias. I also didn't really see that coming because of the lighthearted banter before it so you done that really well. The dynamic between Sawada and Kiyotaka is nice as well since you've made Kiyotaka a tiny bit more expressive which will make the story go more unpredictable since it's to early to have the whole picture of their depth individually and together. The story feels a bit slow considering it's already been 4 chapters but I think that's fine since it's still early and it's likely to move faster since they've arrived at the classroom. Sawada could be unpredictable in his movements towards his classmates and the s-system which will speed it up if that happens. I'll just have to wait and see but you've done well I think. I'm extremely tired so this may be a bit lackluster.