Laugh4lisha

@_kaylise_ thank you for the feedback ! I really appreciate it ! I don't really like writing, I was just doing it to pass the time. That's why I stopped the books. I won't pick them back up but I will definitely take your words into consideration in my writings in the future !

Laugh4lisha

@_kaylise_ thank you for the feedback ! I really appreciate it ! I don't really like writing, I was just doing it to pass the time. That's why I stopped the books. I won't pick them back up but I will definitely take your words into consideration in my writings in the future !

_kaylise_

Your intentions of both stories are good, but with love and music,  it got a little confusing.  I was told just little details can make up your whole  book, the characters  thoughts ,feelings , etc. Try to describe your characters without making it so obvious too, it will sound less  clichè . Lastly, if you are to write song verses, don't make them too long, your audience (maybe, depends on who) will probably get tired of reading them. Put a line or two, then describe the way the characters feel when they sing. Their every emotion, maybe why they wrote the song...