LaughingJackOfficial

@A_Dark_Harmony 
          	
          	Oh sorry dear for the late reply, I have to say I fell in love with "Jess", such a great story. I read Oneshot (the one with me of course) and I felt it was a little rushed, I think it had a lot of potential to be a longer story. Giving more insight as to who the character really is, there personality, life and such. I like to keep any my readers in constant questioning "what's going on?" "Who's that new person?" And so forth. An idea would have been to start with a character who is morally correct and all around sweet person then throwing in a character who is the complete opposite. I personally enjoy watching the morally correct characters slowly falling for the twisted attitude of the immorally correct character. A story should never feel rushed but if it can't be helped try adding us much descriptive details as you can, it will fool the reader into thinking the story is longer than it actually is.

adarkharmony

@LaughingJackOfficial It is alright,don't worry.I wrote that one shot a long time ago,and just posted it.Thank you for the advice though,it was quite helpful.I just needed a story to kick off the book.I may make another longer one and put it into my Fanfiction book with several different parts.Or perhaps it will be a book on it's own...
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LaughingJackOfficial

@A_Dark_Harmony 
          
          Oh sorry dear for the late reply, I have to say I fell in love with "Jess", such a great story. I read Oneshot (the one with me of course) and I felt it was a little rushed, I think it had a lot of potential to be a longer story. Giving more insight as to who the character really is, there personality, life and such. I like to keep any my readers in constant questioning "what's going on?" "Who's that new person?" And so forth. An idea would have been to start with a character who is morally correct and all around sweet person then throwing in a character who is the complete opposite. I personally enjoy watching the morally correct characters slowly falling for the twisted attitude of the immorally correct character. A story should never feel rushed but if it can't be helped try adding us much descriptive details as you can, it will fool the reader into thinking the story is longer than it actually is.

adarkharmony

@LaughingJackOfficial It is alright,don't worry.I wrote that one shot a long time ago,and just posted it.Thank you for the advice though,it was quite helpful.I just needed a story to kick off the book.I may make another longer one and put it into my Fanfiction book with several different parts.Or perhaps it will be a book on it's own...
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