Ok I reread everything and this story need to be reconstructed I realized multiple mistakes in the first chapter lots of them and things that are needed in the story that are not being seen or even recognize so I may have to redo edit a lot of things into the story I messed up but I think as a beginner I did okay well as well as I could do.
If anyone has any opinion or tips please do reach out and tell me, I could really use the help. Thanks༆
https://www.wattpad.com/story/295431969