Personally, I love your writing! Everyone has their own style ya know?? If I had to make any suggestions I would suggest adding sensory details. For example, the lighting in a scene (this would include the weather as well!) or the mood of the room, if that makes sense! I think the most important thing is to help the reader imagine the scene. So, things like that would help!! But honestly, I love your writing style, keep up the good work!! <33