Well, I ended up plowing through and finished 3 more chapters. I was feeling a little worried about the story cohesiveness, but I reread it all from the beginning, and I'm not so worried about it anymore. I don't think it's my best work or anything, but I felt like it had a satisfying hook and a solid conflict.
Overall, there wasn't anything super important missing, but I feel like it might have too many bridges... idk. I'm pretty good at showing my story's interesting parts and telling the boring parts that can't be left out, but I could be wrong this time - I don't really write this sort of story often. Either way, the story felt fun as I read it over, which is what I was aiming for.
The dialog felt especially solid and gave me the feeling it might draw the readers into the story. I realized I might have left out some description... I'm a little embarrassed now, but if I focus too much on the description and fix it, my chapter sizes will explode. I'm going to reread it again soon, specifically to look for the princess' eye color, though. I kinda freaked out halfway through the read, thinking, "Wait... did I skip over the princess' eye color completely? I can't do that she's a love interest..." Then I cried a little inside.
Welp, it's still a work in progress .